The
stars glittered like a diamond necklace in the black velvet sky and the moon
washed the land in a gentle light. The only sound that could be heard was the
slow munching of the sandwiches. BOOM! A loud noise vibrated through the land.
I hung back paralysed by terror. “What was that? I asked. But the alien didn't reply,
he focused on the sky. A trickle of sweat poured down my neck. “What is going on!
“I demanded. Still no reply. BOOM! Another loud noise came. I turned around to
see where the alien was but he had disappeared.
What an exhilarating piece of writing, well done for using so many 'power' words! I just loved 'the slow munching of sandwiches'.
ReplyDeleteBrilliant.
Mrs T.
Wow! What a fantastic entry for the 100WC! This is a dramatic piece with a lovely range of adjectives. I love how you've left the story on a cliffhanger. I'd love to know what happens next.
ReplyDeleteWell done & keep up the good work.
Laura (100WC Team)