Journey 2: The Mysterious Island
I found myself on a strange island. I lost
my only weapon. It was a tiny Swiss Army pocket knife. I felt vulnerable
without it. I explored the forest, to find: swamps, caves, rivers and other
fascinating wonders. After a few hours (or was it a few weeks?), I found a way
to get off this mysterious, creepy and dangerous island. It was a sail boat
with oars, if there was no wind. I checked it out for holes, and when I found
none, I dragged it to the shore (painfully, as I had to go through the forest
again). And I pushed it out.
Well, this story was full of mystery right to the end! If the character didn't know where they were, or how they got there then which way would they row? They are certainly braver than me. I liked your comments in brackets- they gave the reader an insight into what the character was thinking and feeling.There's some great description in there too- I think this could definitely be extended to make a really good short story, to answer some of those questions the reader has. Well done- good work.
ReplyDeleteFiona (Team 100WC)