I was lying on the bed. Wondering what mum was doing.
Just then I smelled something horrible. Then I got out of the bed, tip-toed to the kitchen.
I gasped. My mum was cooking! She is clumsy at cooking.
After a while,she noticed me, she sang
"I made you a custard, Tom!"
"Am...mum, I'm kind of full."
"Ok, then just eat one piece."
I couldn't stop my mum. Therefore, I ate one piece...
The custard tasted like very salty food. It was really salty.
"Now, how was it Tom?" Mum asked me, I didn't know what to say.
Just then I smelled something horrible. Then I got out of the bed, tip-toed to the kitchen.
I gasped. My mum was cooking! She is clumsy at cooking.
After a while,she noticed me, she sang
"I made you a custard, Tom!"
"Am...mum, I'm kind of full."
"Ok, then just eat one piece."
I couldn't stop my mum. Therefore, I ate one piece...
The custard tasted like very salty food. It was really salty.
"Now, how was it Tom?" Mum asked me, I didn't know what to say.
Well done, Yuina.
ReplyDeleteYour sentences are nice and clear with good use of speech punctuation. Check your use of the first full stop.
Keep up the good work!