Grandma Betty looked at her husband and he looked at
her. She stuffed the key in her
knickers, and hopped on her mobility scooter.
As rapid as the ants in your backyard, she ‘whirr-rr-rr-rr-ed down the
hall. She heard the angry ‘Clunk-clunk’
of Granddad Blue Wheels’ scooter. She ‘whirr-rr-rr-rr-ed
in and out of her bedroom, stuffing a lipstick into her handbag…
The janitor was shocked to see Grandma and Granddad ZOOM down the condominium stairs. They tore outside and Grandma Betty dove into
the pond with her boots on. Granddad
whipped out his phone just in time to
take a picture.
Gabriel -
ReplyDeleteI'm not sure where this story came from, but it's brilliant fun, and just a little bit naughty! As well as being fun and creative, it moves at a really good pace, and you've chosen some great vocabulary ("stuffed", "hopped", "stuffing", for instance) which really brings it to life for your reader.
Well done: great work.
-Mike.