The Speechless Performance
It was Christopher’s turn to perform for the audience. He advanced
to the stage with full confidence and positioned himself. But it was only
peaceful until he commenced playing his horrible, second-hand, old fashioned, violin. The noise was deafening and could be
heard screeching all across the school hall. I peeked through the curtains and
glanced at the audience.They all stared at Christopher with their eyes wide
open.....even the babies stopped crying! He kept on playing his terrible piece
and didn't take any notice them.The audience was frozen in shock when he
finished.
Nice! IT's very good and easy to understand.
ReplyDeleteHi Ishika
ReplyDeleteI love your use of descriptive language in the story. I can just visualise Christopher and his stunned audience.
The beginning of your story sets the scene of a great musician about to perform, which makes it so much funnier when your reveal his screeching!
Always read though your story before posting to check for small errors, such as you are missing 'of' from 'any notice of them' in your penultimate sentence.
Keep up the great work,
Bryony (Team 100WC)
Thank you!!
DeleteAnother excellent piece if descriptive writing, Ishika. I can just imagine Christopher on the stage, oblivious of the audience, playing his violin.
ReplyDeleteKeep up the good work.
Mrs T
Thank you Mrs.T!!
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