SCREECH!!! The car raced inside the unknown, unwanted
forest; the Rolls Royce smashed the trees, and then there was one light, not
two, not three, but one diffuse light.
The driver, Mr Posho, was extreme- you know by his
name-don’t you? He was so posh he could not have something not posh. For some reason he had take too many drugs and
went CRAZY!
He destroyed the National Gallery which had the oldest tree
in the UK but now it is only a couple of pieces of bark and pure wood, Mr Posho
was arrested.
Conclusion. Do NOT take drugs!
Hi Yanni!
ReplyDeleteI really like the beginning, where you start with a SCREECH!!!
The part where I really appreciate, is where you say 'not two, not three, but one diffuse light'.
The driver, Mr POSHo- I have noticed something...there is some connection with posh and Mr. Posho - don't you think?
You are also telling an interesting fact...a useful one too 'DO NOT take drugs'
Keep up the awesome work and try to improve more!
Swarna BISB
An interesting story ... with a moral message too Yanni; I like it!
ReplyDeleteThat's a great opening - the use of capitals together with exclamation marks immediately gets the reader's attention. Like Swarna, the way you emphasised 'one light' really works for me too. The only thing I wasn't sure about, was how the 'unknown forest' and the 'National Gallery' fitted together. I wonder if there's a way you could have linked them?
Well done and keep rising to the Challenge!