Crunch, crunch! The branches were sticking to my clothes. Can you guess where we were now? Well, we were in a large gloomy forest．However, we were lost. Unfortunately, it became darker and
darker. I went to the forest with my family. Luckily, my dad had brought a tent and some
food, so at least we had shelter. My dad
and I were looking at the shiny moon; my mother and brother were
slumbering. Then, we fell asleep.
I opened my eyes in the darkness. Something was there!
…And then I saw a bright light… yes! I
found a way to escape! Finally, we got out.
Yuina, your English is improving all the time. I am so pleased that you have included some adventurous vocabulary.
ReplyDeleteA great effort!
Mrs T.
A really well written 100wc here Yuina, well done. Have you been working on sentence openers? There are so many here! I think I might have to show my class :-)
ReplyDeleteExcellent punctuation throughout as well - well done.
Sometimes leaving the reader in suspense can make them want more...maybe you could have done this with your ending?
Keep writing!
Mr Connor