At the riverbank
“Ah”said a man in his thirties; “I can already smell a
million of fish from here”. He threw the rod [holding the bottom of course]. So
then he waited, and waited, and waited until the rod started to move! He
quickly ran and got the rod and started to pull it towards, just then; he
missed a beat he saw a big, pink, hairless, and angry looking fish. It had
sharp teeth, stuck out eyes and surprisingly was a fish, then... You know what... He fainted. And for the fish
he just hopped back in the lake.
I like the way that you have included lots of descriptive details in your writing. This really paints a picture in the reader's mind! Well done!
ReplyDeleteVery good,Yanni a great texture of adjectives.Well Done
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