The White Mask
James was a young
man, a normal guy.
He lived in an
apartment near a (haunted) factory.
One night after a
very hard day, James went to bed early, suddenly he hears a crack(suspense), he
thought just let it be but after some
minutes he heard another crack, so he put on the light and grabbed his torch,
he looked right, left , he saw nothing
there was a big silence…
He turned, his
heart thudded, right in front of him a man dressed in black with a white mask
and a bloody dagger and… James woke-up.
Hello Kalzang,
ReplyDeleteWhat a great 100WC, you have told a very exciting story within such a few words. I like the way you have used paragraphs and sentence length to create tension. You also have a good understanding of how to use different punctuation. However try to avoid making exciting stories into a dream, it would have been a more amazing ending if you had stopped at " bloody dagger...." Keeping the reader guessing.
Keep up the good work.